Dazza Posted January 3, 2007 Share Posted January 3, 2007 (edited) Chapters: Chapter One: So it begins...(on this post) Chapter Two: Sexual Feeling Chapter Three: Death in its wake Chapter Four: The last Leone Chapter Five: A job going ahead.... Chapter Six: Destruction Everywhere Chapter Seven: Not so sweet streets of Vice Chapter Eight: The First Signs Chapter Nine: The Made Men A city made on top of a biblical area, Bahan has been filled with terroists and war from day dot. Now terriost group Iselo runs the town and the American don't like that. After 5 years in a major U.S prison, detainee John Wilkes is released after the court case of the century, John gave evidence about a leader of the biggest terriost cell in the world, John was found not guilty. He was just on his way home when a plane blew up killing his whole family and 200 people on there way to Australia. The only evidence was a note written a week later claiming that John Wilkes put the bomb on the plane. Now John has to not only escape jail in the US but travel half way around the world to the middle east to find and kill the person responsible for everything Usame fin Carten. Chapter 1: So it begins... Friday the 5th of January 2007 12.03 pm Military Court House S.A Judge: Now what do you have to show me John. John: I have a map of Iselo's base. Judge: Then show me! John: Ok, ok just chill mate. John hands the Judge the photos and map. Judge: Ok good, good, good. Looks over photos and maps. Judge: (Over walkie talkie) Ok I got the photos what do you want me to do with them? Voice: Get rid of him. He'll be dealt with later. Judge: Ok sure. (To John) You're free to go John. John: Thank you so much Judge Speed. Sunday the 7th of January 2007 11.54 am Easter Bay Airport, San Fierro Loud Speaker: Flight 746 to Adelaide, Australia now boarding at gate 21. John: Oh that's mine. Monday the 8th of January 2007 5:28 am Adelaide International Airport, South Australia Loud Speaker: Welcome to Adelaide, Australia. Have a nice day. John (thinking to himself): Wow im home. Gets a phone call. John: Hello? Voice: Hello John. I know who you are. Now help me or your family will die! John: I think your bluffing. Voice: Im not, now do what I say. John: Ok I'll play your little game Voice: Good now there's a car outside get in it and go home, I'll meet you there. Good-bye. Walks outside to taxi area. John: Oi im here. Driver: Ok, ok im here. HOLY SHIT YOUR JOHN WILKES! Wait you got off didn't you. John gets in car John: Yeah I did Mate. Driver: Cool anyways where do you want to go? John: Unley. Just off Fisher Street near Fullaton Park Centre. Driver: Is that where you live? John: Yeah it is. Now lets go Edited April 6, 2007 by Dazza Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 4, 2007 Author Share Posted January 4, 2007 Dosnt anyone like my story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 10, 2007 Author Share Posted January 10, 2007 Ok i no this is a double post.......Sorry......its just i want people to know this i have writen a story......look on the first post ^^^^^^^^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stojko Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 What happens after he goes home? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 10, 2007 Author Share Posted January 10, 2007 Im bout to tell you. ------------------------------------------------ Chapter 2: Sexual Feeling Monday the 8th of January 2007 6:59 am 98 Fisher Street, Unley John: Thanks this is it. Driver: You sure bout that. John: Very mate. Driver: Ok then. My name is Joey by the way. John: Ok Joey see you later then. John rolls his eyes while Joey drives off. John nocks on the door. John: Mum, Dad, im home. Girl: Who might that be at our door, Jenny? Jenny: I don’t know Mercedes, lets go look. The door opens and too very beautiful women appear kissing each other. Jenny: Oh hi, you’re hot. Mercedes: Yeah I agree but he did wake us up. Jenny: Then we should give him a good spanking. John: Oh sorry I have to leave, I have to find my parents. Mercedes: No stay, Please. John: No I cant, I have to…. Jenny and Mercedes grab John’s arms as he begins to leave. Monday the 8th of January 2007 7:14 am 98 Fisher Street, Unley John, Jenny and Mercedes: Oh yeah, oh, oh, oh, YEEEEEEEAAAAAAAH Monday the 8th of January 2007 7:36 am 98 Fisher Street, Unley John’s running out of the house. Without any pants on and screaming. John: WHAT THE f*** IS WRONG WITH YOU TWO. THAT’S WAY TO f***ING KINKY FOR ME. SHIT. f*** THIS SHIT. Jenny: WELL f*** YOU THEN. MAN SLUT.WANTING TO f*** WOMAN FOR YOUR ENJOYMENT. f*** YOU. Mercedes: YEAH STUFF YOU MAN-BITCH. The phone rings again Jenny: YOUR PHONE IS RINGING DICKHEAD. TAKE IT. Jenny throws John’s phone at him. John: Thanks NOT! (In the phone) Hello Voice: Hello its me, now I hope you haven’t met anyone yet, here in Adelaide. John: Umm yeah I have, two girls inside my old house. Voice: Well consider them dead. A car drives up to the house. A guy gets out of the car and walks up the path. They ring the doorbell and the girls appear again. Then two shots are fired and the two girls drop down dead. Voice: Take this car to my place at in Port Adelaide. You can stay there. John: Ok but first what happened to my parents. Voice: Due time my friend, in due time. John: Dude f***ing tell me or else. Voice: Or what, you’ll hurt me. Ha, oh just to let you know, cross me and something will go boom with your name all over it. John: Fine I’ll come to your house. Asshole. Voice: Don’t speak like that to me. Meet you in a while. Phone cuts out. Car Driver: Come on get in. Oh and take this. The car driver hands the pistol to John Car Driver: Added security, don’t worry, now get in. John: Ok im getting in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stojko Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 Okkkk..... What about chapter three? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 11, 2007 Author Share Posted January 11, 2007 Chapter three is coming soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rav0001 Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 pretty awsome story, whens the 3rd chapter coming? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 11, 2007 Author Share Posted January 11, 2007 ummmm......i might make you wait. Nuh here is chapter three Chapter 3: Death in its wakes Monday the 8th of January 2007 8:21 am Port Rd, Albert Park The taxi gets a flat tire as they drove over the train tracks. John and the driver get out to push the car aside from the road into a small abandoned car park. John: Shit, why’d this have to happen now. I need to find my parents. Driver: Can’t you ring RAA first. John: What the f*** is RAA!? Driver: How long were you in that U.S prison for? It’s the Royal Automobile Association. Just ring them 13 11 11. John: Fine (Picks up mobile and rings RAA) RAA man: Hello this is the RAA emergence service, please tell us where you are and we will get a van right out to you. John: (whispers to the car driver) where the hell are we? Driver: Where on the corner of Port Rd and Cheltham Road. John: (back on the phone) the corner of Port Rd and Cheltham Road, in an abandoned car park. RAA man: Thank you, van 264 will be out in the next hour. If you like my service please give my name, Yena to my boss on………… John throws the phone onto the ground and it brakes cutting Yena off. Monday the 8th of January 2007 9:01 am Port Rd, Albert Park Johns pacing the car park. While the car driver was inside the car playing a PSP. John: Where the f*** is the mechanic? Driver: (looks up from the PSP game) I don’t know, just wait, ok. John: No, I need to find my parents NOW. (Grabs his pistol from the back of the car and shoots at the tires) Driver: Jesus Christ man, hope you knew that we only one spare tire. John: f***, why did you tell me that, I can change a f***ing tire. John shoots the Driver in the head. He falls out of the car onto the gravel. John puts the body into the trunk of the car and closes the trunk. John: Dude, for f***s sake. Never mess with an ex-terriost John sees a Sabre at the intersection. He goes over and steals it and drives off up Port Road. Monday the 8th of January 2007 9:14 am Coburg Rd, Alberton John is driving around trying to find his old friends place. He has gone to nearly every house on the block when he gets to his friends house. John: Man, I hope he lives here still lives here. (John walks up the long drive way up to the door) HELLO DAZ, YOU HERE! Daz: Who the hell is that? (Daz walks outside) Oi don’t scream like…… (Daz trails off) Oh my god, Johnnie its you. John: You bet it is. Daz: Oh man, I thought they killed you. John: Nope im here, but I need a place to stay. Daz: What about your parents? John: I don’t know where they are, I think they’ve been kidnapped. Daz: Well if anyone it would be Chantelle. John: What? My sister. Daz: Yeah, I married her. Now come inside and have a shower and clothes you can borrow. John follows Daz inside his house. John walks in and the walls are covered with guns and maps about unknown places. A kid runs up and hugs John. Monday the 8th of January 2007 9:19 am Leone Headquarters, Port Adelaide Leone Member: (Runs in) Boss, I just got word, the driver is dead and John is missing, he stole a car and drove off, he’s armed and dangerous, should I alert the cops. Boss: No, let him run, for now, he’ll come back, we have his parents. (Laughs) Leone Member: You sure bout this, like I said he is dangerous. Boss: Don’t you think I know that, look he used to live here, so he might still have friends here, I don’t know, maybe he’ll go to a hotel, look he’ll be here withier he likes it or not. Now hand me my phone. The Leone Member hands the boss the phone. She dials the number. Operator: Sorry make sure you have the right number and try again. Boss: Shit, what happened!? She tries the number again. Operator: Sorry make sure you have the right number and try again. Boss: f*** (She opens up her desk drawer and takes out a zipped up bag full of white powder) (She points at the Leone Gang Member) Leave now! (She opens the bag and grabs the straw that lies next to her cup) (She puts the straw into the bag and up her nose, then she snorts) Oh that’s the stuff I needed come to mama. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rav0001 Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 kool! are u making a 4??? weres john? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 11, 2007 Author Share Posted January 11, 2007 Its coming but i havent posted it on the other site yet so its coming......he is at Dazs place......who do u think the boss is of the leones Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rav0001 Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 oh.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 11, 2007 Author Share Posted January 11, 2007 (edited) So u dont know.......the ansewer will surpise you Edited January 11, 2007 by Dazza Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stojko Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 So when is it coming? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 14, 2007 Author Share Posted January 14, 2007 Later tonight maybe if i can be bothered putting it up. But i need people saying they like it or i might stop Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rav0001 Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 i like them.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 14, 2007 Author Share Posted January 14, 2007 Yer, but what do you like about it........?????? Is it funny........Good story line etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rav0001 Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 its pretty funny and it has a good story line... p.s its funny when john goes in the house with the two girls... and when the driver is playing his psp.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 14, 2007 Author Share Posted January 14, 2007 Well im just gonna give a little spoiler for some people: Daz may die sometime soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 15, 2007 Author Share Posted January 15, 2007 Chapter 4: The last Leone Tuesday the 9th of January 2007 11:39 am Coburg Rd, Alberton After a long shower and a rest, John gets up and goes for a walk around the house. Chantelle: So, bro when did the U.S military let you off? John: (Yawns) I think bout a week ago, I don’t know with all the shit that’s happened. Dazza walks in Dazza: Dude, with what you’ve been though over the last few days, I wasn’t surprised that you slept that long. John: Ha ha, laugh it up. Look do you two want to know what’s happened? Dazza and Chantelle: Yeah. Chantelle: Just let me make sure Kari’s not listening. John: Kari? Dazza: Yeah the kid, bit short, female, remember yet? John: Oh yeah sure. Chantelle gets up and goes into the other room. Kari slowly walks out of the room and backward into her bedroom near the back of the house. Monday the 8th of January 2007 9:24 am Leone Headquarters, Port Adelaide Joey is pacing the outside of the bosses’ office. When finally the door open reveling the don of the Leones. Joey: Wow, when my dad married you, I thought awesome, a hot mum, but all you’ve given is ugliness to the Leone name and you kill my father with that f***ing mute. I don’t know how you became the Don of the Leones, Maria. Maria: Well, thanks to your dads will, he gave me all right and ownership of the family if he died. And well after what happened to your Dad back in ’01, I now claim my right to this family. Joey: You bitch, I knew I should have killed you when I got the chance in ’03. Maria: Well guess what? You will never have that chance of killing me. But I will of you. Joey: What? Maria: Guys take him out. Two gunshots are herd though out the Headquarters. Joey Leone drops on the floor with blood pouring out of his head. Maria: Can someone clean this up? Oh and get me Johns number NOW! Tuesday the 9th of January 2007 12:03 pm Coburg Rd, Alberton John has just finished his telling his story to Dazza and Chantelle, then a phone rings in the household. Dazza: I’ll get it. (Runs over to the phone) Hello Voice: Hello Daryl…… Dazza: Don’t ever call me that, its Dazza. Voice: I’ll call you what I want, now let me talk to John. Dazza: Fine. (Yells out) Oi Johnnie it’s for you. Dazza hands John the phone. John: I know its you. Voice: Oh very smart, now why’d you kill my driver. John: He was pissing me off. Voice: Oh well, no big deal, now I’ve sent another driver to pick you up please don’t kill him. John: Fine. (Hangs up) (To Chantelle and Dazza) Ok guys I have to go, but I will be back, don’t worry. Dazza: Wait before you go, I want you to have this. (Picks up a Micro-SMG) Ands heres some ammunition (Picks up some ammunition) (Hands John the SMG and ammunition) Look be careful and don’t go to jail this time. John: Sure thanks mate. See ya. See ya Chantelle and Kari. Walks outside and gets into the black car with the SMG and ammunition Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rav0001 Posted January 20, 2007 Share Posted January 20, 2007 awsome! is there gonna be a FIVE? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 21, 2007 Author Share Posted January 21, 2007 Chapter 5 is coming soon............it gets really good in chapter 6 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 21, 2007 Author Share Posted January 21, 2007 Chapter 5: A job going ahead… Tuesday the 9th of January 2007 1:09 pm Just off Semaphore Rd, Semaphore The car pulls up to a house; it is beautiful, posh green gardens and a high fence. With a cheetah sitting in the drive way. John: Who lives here? Driver: The head Boss John: Boss of what? Driver: Just get out and you should know. John: Fine then. Bye John just out the car, grabbing his SMG and ammunition. He walks up the stone steps and rings the door bell. Voice: Come in its open. John opens the door. He steps inside the mansion. Tuesday the 9th of January 2007 12:43 pm Coburg Rd, Alberton Dazza is watching T.V. while Chantelle and Kari are playing Simpsons Monopoly. The phone rings, Dazza gets up to get it. But Kari beat him to it. Kari: Hello, who may I ask is talking? Voice: Oh aren’t you sweet, can I talk to your Daddy please. Kari: Sure. (Yells out) DAD IT’S FOR YOU! Dazza: (Gets up from his chair) Im coming (Kari hands the phone over to Dazza) (On the phone) Hello. Voice: Im sorry to inform you but your house will be raided in, five………four……… Dazza: (Drops the phone and yells) everyone into the basement NOW! Chantelle: Why, what’s going……… Dazza: (Interrupts Chantelle) Just go NOW! (Runs behind the girls and shuts the door and locks it) Ok now we going to be attacked (Hears a missive bang) now, well Chantelle I will give you this 9mm. pistol and on my queue jump into the car and drive off. Chantelle: What about you? Dazza: Don’t worry about me, just go when I say. Chantelle: (starts crying) Ok sure, get in the car Kari. Kari gets into the car. Chantelle: Shit I don’t have the keys. I left them on the table upstairs. Dazza: Damn it, cant you hotwire it. (Chantelle shakes her head) fine I’ll do it. (Gets into the car and switches some of the wires around) Ok it’s done now im going to clear your path out of here. Chantelle: Ok, be careful, (Kisses Dazza on cheek) (Gets into the car) Dazza grabs the RPG and the remote for the garage, he gets into position. He pushes the button on the remote. And fires the Rocket. Dazza: GO NOW! The car speeds off into the distance and all the girls herd where 3 gun shots. Dazza’s world went black. Tuesday the 9th of January 2007 1:16 pm Just off Semaphore Rd, Semaphore John is walking around the house looking for someone or something. He keeps walking opening every door and is getting annoyed that no-one is there. Until he tries one door upstairs but it’s locked. John: Why won’t this open! Voice: (over a loud speaker) don’t go into that room. Now welcome to my house I hope you like it. Now your first mission is to go down to Semaphore Beach and place a bomb underneath the jetty. All the stuff is in room 24. John: What if I say no! Voice: Well remember what I said before, something will happen with your name all over it and your parents will die. John: So you have my parents? Voice: I don’t but, someone else does and I will give the orders to kill them. John: Your bluffing, I don’t give in to threats, im going to find you though. And you’ll pay for my time. Voice: Ha, well you’re going to pay for this and I mean it. (A buzzing noise is herd over the speaker) John: I hate people that make sick jokes. (He walks out of the house) (Starts to walk back to Dazza’s place) Tuesday the 9th of January 2007 5:53 am Somewhere in Bahan The Boss (also known as ‘Voice’) is now getting pissed off at John, not following his orders, so he is now on the phone to his gang’s underboss. The Boss: Maria, he fell for it, it goes to plan, tomorrow. Got that? Has the bombs been planted and is everything ready to send? Maria: Yes boss, everything is ready for tomorrow, he is going to be in jail by Friday, when do you want the letter to be sent? The Boss: Today. This will be a flight that Mr. and Mrs. Wilkes won’t forget. (Hangs up) Tuesday the 9th of January 2007 1:22 pm Semaphore Rd, Semaphore After a long walk, John hails a taxi. John: 12 Coburg Rd. please. Taxi Diver: Sure mate, anytime. So where you from? John: Just drive! Ok? Taxi Driver: Fine arsehole. John: Believe me im doing you a favor. Taxi Driver: Bullshit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stojko Posted January 27, 2007 Share Posted January 27, 2007 Chapter 6? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazza Posted January 27, 2007 Author Share Posted January 27, 2007 well google, i was going to post chapter 6, but im not getting the feedback i want so, if you want more you have to post saying what you like about it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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